Boot Camp Keegan

Wales-CiN-Urgent

feeds@yuku.com (Snowball136) — Fri, 13 Nov 2009 12:39:14 GMT

I have had no response from Margot or Dan ref the above. I am presuming, therefore, that CiN at The Chapel is OFF

CARVER and Edits

feeds@yuku.com (Snowball136) — Sat, 31 Oct 2009 21:09:10 GMT

I almost bought "Beginners" by RC today

and felt like comparing and contrasting the originals (tidied)
with the ruthless Lish edits

BUT the Library of America volume has the originals and the edits
so why not buy that? It's quality paper and has ALL of Carver's prose

The number's don't tally!

feeds@yuku.com (DMWriting) — Wed, 28 Oct 2009 22:09:57 GMT

Odd, really, how it appears as if these threads are being read by so many people (89 for the thread on The Ledge!?!?!), and yet there's only, apparently, Margot, Jason, AK and myself around.

Another mystery story to crit!

feeds@yuku.com (DMWriting) — Wed, 28 Oct 2009 21:45:01 GMT

Seeing as we're having so much fun with these, here's another.

Will try and post a crit tomorrow
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Al Roosten stood nervously behind the paper screen. Was he nervous? Well, he was a little nervous. Although probably a lot less nervous than most people would be. Most people would probably be pissing themselves by now. Was he pissing himself? Not yet. Although, wow, he could understand how someone might actually-

...

Story to crit

feeds@yuku.com (DMWriting) — Fri, 23 Oct 2009 21:27:21 GMT

Not going to give the author or title...

Will post my crit tomorrow

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ONE of my representatives -- a modest, mild bachelor, very efficient -- happened to win a pleasure trip at a charity ball given by Russian refugees. The Berlin summer was in full flood (it was the second week of damp and cold, so that it was a pity to look at everything which had turned green in vain, and only the sparrows kept cheerful); he did not care to go anywhere,...

When to give up on a story...?

feeds@yuku.com (DMWriting) — Fri, 23 Oct 2009 19:48:04 GMT

So, i've tried a few times in the last few weeks to string more than a few words together to form that thing we all know as a story. And every time I have hit some kind of wall, usually at the end of the first 'scene', or as the story needs to segue into something like a middle, where I look at the story, see how or where it may be going, and realise that it's not up to scratch. There's usually a fundamental problem. It may be that the MC is too passive/lacks motivation....

October 23rd Friday prompts

feeds@yuku.com (DMWriting) — Fri, 23 Oct 2009 10:29:29 GMT

Behind her was confusion
a beautiful, healthy young woman
Infantile knee-high white-painted gates
no sadness of farewell
So buck up, little trooper!
if you were not my son.
To protect your privacy, hand over your data
HE stood against the kitchen sink, and looked
I don't question God.
the suburbs were dreary: places to joke about
another baby
But I'd suggest you count your blessings instead.
The sun shone unfalteringly...

October 22nd Thursday Prompts

feeds@yuku.com (Snowball136) — Thu, 22 Oct 2009 07:32:19 GMT

And then by drowning

Maggot

The three car crash

Wounded bird, tree

We only remember their names

Red Slippers

We ride into battle, our horses do not volunteer

A House with green wallpaper

Eggs

Rock and Bloody Roll

The Arbortionist's Lunch

I will not come out until someone apologises

I made a sculpture of my father, without a heart

You Have Mail!

How...

28 Days, Wednesday 21st

feeds@yuku.com (Snowball136) — Wed, 21 Oct 2009 07:57:16 GMT

Women in neon passing the window

Career Path

Plain-Clothes detectives are operating in this store

Tripod

What I was about to say

In my attic

She leaves the nursery and begins to walk

There is a pause in the music

Another Toy

I will choose a child not my colour

All the ships have left, the last plane

A Silver Bracelet

So I opened the parcel

ACID

I stood...

October 21st Wednesday Prompts

feeds@yuku.com (Snowball136) — Wed, 21 Oct 2009 07:56:26 GMT

Carver Uncut

feeds@yuku.com (Jason) — Sun, 18 Oct 2009 22:59:17 GMT

Has anyone checked out this volume?

http://www.guardian.co.uk/books/2009/oct/17/raymond-carver-beginners-blake-morrison

Hard to believe an editor can cut 78% of a story, change the title, hack off the ending, and still have something worth publishing.

Saturday 17th October prompts

feeds@yuku.com (DMWriting) — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 09:24:06 GMT

Her slow grace
Not only am I well-off, but I'm also well-muscled.
pepper spray
looming signals
exhales from her like a perfume,
Let them be dry and leafless
beautiful woman on a park bench
Nine times out of ten,
her slim figure
And the trees about me,
the woman was interested in me,
There are footsteps behind you in the dark alley and they're getting closer.
sensitivity,
"You want a piece of this,...

I'm off for a couple of days

feeds@yuku.com (Jason) — Fri, 16 Oct 2009 12:31:05 GMT

Back on Sunday.

Friday 16 Prompts

feeds@yuku.com (Snowball136) — Fri, 16 Oct 2009 09:43:50 GMT

And for another twenty-five pounds, a neat leather wallet

Frozen Shoulder

I Have My Lover's Heart (in the fridge)

Come Live With Me and be my fuck-buddy

Shall I compare thee to a 0-0 draw in Crewe on a wet Monday?

Here, have an onion

Bloody Men!

Flea

Catch a Falling Star and Put Him in Hello

Drink to Me, Leona

Gather a few roses and that

You waste your time and mine

When...

28 Days Prompts 14. Friday 16th October

feeds@yuku.com (Snowball136) — Fri, 16 Oct 2009 09:43:24 GMT